Comments on: Deus Absconditus http://johnbakersblog.co.uk/deus-absconditus/ Reflections of a working writer and reader Thu, 18 Mar 2010 15:55:34 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.1 hourly 1 By: Jim Murdoch http://johnbakersblog.co.uk/deus-absconditus/comment-page-1/#comment-108610 Jim Murdoch Wed, 16 Apr 2008 11:58:40 +0000 http://johnbakersblog.co.uk/?p=1084#comment-108610 Like all your recent descriptive pieces I enjoyed this one. I've always hated writing descriptions and either avoid them completely or cut them down to their essentials. The one thing that didn't sit too well with me was the punch line. It works but, knowing that the guy has already eaten breakfast, albeit not the one in his head, I see him leaving with it weighing heavily on his tummy. Just a thought. Loved 'Hawkeye' by the way. Like all your recent descriptive pieces I enjoyed this one. I’ve always hated writing descriptions and either avoid them completely or cut them down to their essentials.

The one thing that didn’t sit too well with me was the punch line. It works but, knowing that the guy has already eaten breakfast, albeit not the one in his head, I see him leaving with it weighing heavily on his tummy. Just a thought. Loved ‘Hawkeye’ by the way.

]]> By: M.E Ellis http://johnbakersblog.co.uk/deus-absconditus/comment-page-1/#comment-108577 M.E Ellis Mon, 14 Apr 2008 20:27:01 +0000 http://johnbakersblog.co.uk/?p=1084#comment-108577 Highly enjoyable scene. Saw it all! :o) <strong>jb says</strong>: Thanks, Michelle. I appreciate it. Highly enjoyable scene. Saw it all!

:o )

jb says: Thanks, Michelle. I appreciate it.

]]>